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SUBMITTED TO:                                                                  ANALYST:  Anna
SUBMITTED BY:                                                                   DATE: July 14, 2008
AGENCY/COMPANY:                                                         LOCATION:  Texas
FORM/LENGTH:  91p                                                         CIRCA: 1886
DRAFT/PUBLISHER:                                                            GENRE:  Western, Buddy, Animal

LOGLINE : Diego wants to avenge his grandfather, who was shot by El Serpiente- the Scourge of the Southwest. Lacking the chops to enlist in the Texas Rangers, Diego takes off with Dodge, the talking Ranger horse that teaches Diego how to gun sling and save the day.

COMMENTS : --- sticks to the Mr. Ed/Cowboy formula, sometimes at the expense of credibility (e.g. the young bar girl magically appears at the bandito’s hideout once Diego defeats the bad guy, and seems to marry him). The dialogue is more entertaining than most, but in general there is not enough meat in this story to engage an audience.

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SYNOPSIS:

El Serpiente and his goons burn and pillage a Texas town as the Rangers appear. The cutthroats take off, amid lots of blood, into the desert.

Also in the desert is Diego and Alejandro, his grandfather who dreams of opening a restaurant. The gang finds the two, who have food and water, and rob them blind. Alejandro is shot in a scuffle over a rooster.

Left for dead, Diego is found by the Rangers. He fails at the recruitment audition and is given the job of stable boy. Mucking, Diego realizes one of the horses can talk, and in fact has quite a mouth. The horse, Dodge, claims to have trained some of the best cowboys and bandits and they ride into the desert to make Diego capable of bringing justice to El Serpiente.

After learning the cowboy arts and having various little adventures, Diego finds El Serpiente. The Rangers have been taken by him and are being tortured and killed one by one. Diego saves the day, although at the end he must take on El Serpiente without the help of Rangers or Dodge.

 

 

COMMENTS:

It is my natural reaction to cringe when presented with an animal-talking movie. Beyond that, the horse actually does a fair job of being a smart-ass old-schooler teaching the young one a thing or two.

The movie moves with standard Western progression and there are no surprises.

The relationship between Dodge and Diego grows, but it does not really change. The two grow more affectionate towards one another, and Diego becomes more skilled and confident, but there is no huge development in any of their characters. The biggest change is in Caleb, the captain of the Rangers who comes to respect Diego despite his dismal audition.

Banter between the horse and boy prove entertaining in most instances, although somewhat sparse. Most characters speak in the Western style “slipperier than a greased pig”, without too many side-stories.

Filming in New Mexico would be no problem, although there are a few complicated sets: an abandoned pueblo, a bandito camp, and a few border towns.

Specific Notes:
Intro: Where do they carry the women/loot off to?
Pg. 2: Doctor: “excuses... excuse” same line.
Pg. 4: You mean ‘spyglass’. ‘Looking glass’ means a mirror.
Pg. 11: Why is his head bandaged? Is he bleeding the whole time?
Pg. 12: How does he untie himself?
Pg. 31: “Like you got a pair”--- historical language?
Pg. 47: ‘backwash’?--- same problem
Pg. 60: “a criminal is what you are”--- confusing
Pg. 81: Taking Dodge’s shoe would a) weigh Diego down and b) impair Dodge’s ability,
especially over the rough terrain.
Pg. 84: How is that the same deal?
Pg. 85: What makes the shots “well-placed”?
Why would he extend his arm to look for El Serpiente?
Pg. 86: Isn’t a crotch shot a... well, low blow?
Why would he hit him with the horseshoe? Isn’t the point that he can now punch
well?
Pg. 87: How did Teresa get there?
Pg. 89: ‘Tucus’ is Yiddish, not cowboy.

General: Diego promises to make El Seripente say Alejandro’s name, but doesn’t.